10-18-2018, 02:53 PM
The title implies a link but not really to photometry, so perceived brightness/whiteness by the human eye, is about acceptance of our own self worth, be the person you want people to see and if you are decent enough person and believe in yourself, then nothing else matters.
The use of whiteness takes the reader to racial comparison and to me it implies that the base measurement for self improvement is about how like white we can be, so this threw me off the scent a bit when trying to follow the meaning behind the words. My suggestion would be to change the title to photometry and change whiteness to brightness. This imho would let the positive message in the poem shine through. Best Keith
The use of whiteness takes the reader to racial comparison and to me it implies that the base measurement for self improvement is about how like white we can be, so this threw me off the scent a bit when trying to follow the meaning behind the words. My suggestion would be to change the title to photometry and change whiteness to brightness. This imho would let the positive message in the poem shine through. Best Keith
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