Golden City (edit 2.)

[Leanne]

cuts, scabbing into lines of poetry: the violence films -- like billy, I had an immediate "not another emo poem" reaction to this first line -- damn emos and their cliches, ruining it for cutting anything anywhere -- anyway, I think you could get away with starting on "the violence films", which I really like for its ambiguity, but it seems the shape of this is important to you, so...
my lips as I search for the words to rip - lovely sonics here
the creativity out of you. it would be art only
if I stepped back, but for what would you flourish? 
bruises open like wine on your cheeks.
so loving you is so much harder than knowing 
that I just do. already angry that we've outgrown
each other, I call only to hear you care -- "only call" actually sounds better, rhythm-wise and alliteration-wise, to my ear (and syntax-wise, to my brain!)
enough to ask why. this, 

this -- great stanza break
lack of sense, 
is an example of gambling done wrong. -- I feel that leaving out "an example" would strengthen this line 
it's a hazard, the hearts- - maybe a colon after hazard instead?
the lives, the chips- 
when we run out, 
all we can do
is bet on
more.

I did enjoy this piece, Nozaki.  It's very visceral and quite cinematic, with all the senses being well represented.