First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow

[Keith]

Hi Richard I enjoyed reading your poem I like how it switches from a wide vista into macro views of lips and mittens, not so keen on the title or the opening but the rest of the pice is engaging and gives the reader a sense remote lives in a remote place, hence why Im not keen on the title, because i dont think you need to telegraph the content in this way, some line by line below. best Keith

Remoteness

Snow in September, Could be a title but your using it to set the scene so it needs to work harder or could be cut?
a hood hides your face...... Intreging for the reader this starts the poem for me.
like clouds cover stars,.......like is a bit obvious so early in the piece
while a storm prepares.......not a fan of while but really like the subsequent lines and storms bringing about autumns funeral, I wondered away on these lines they are so visual
to bury the dead colours
of autumn.

I think if you could tweek the Like While problem this would be a great opening

North is not a place
for love poems.....I like how this again sets a cold scene but I wouldnt use love or Hearts here simply becuase they dont work hard enough in such a short piece, for me they are pretend words for intimacy and bread crumbs into the next three lines where the reader is given insight into the type of relationship that has been established in this place. You could get a lot more out of this stanza with better word choices than Love Hearts.  
Hearts freeze there,
even when insulated by layers
only you have the patience
to remove and neatly fold,
lips crack, with or without
the pressure of kissing, I like this a lot, very visual
my mittened hands lonely. for me kissing crashes into this final line and I looped around it forming my own ending of Kissing my lonley mittend hands and I'm sure thats not what you are going for but it could just be me.

Hope some of this helps and edit. best Keith