The house with a clock on its wall

The house with a clock on its wall

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10-04-2018, 11:13 AM

This is wonderful - the details, the plot... tracking with closeups. Very satisfying.

I'm wondering if "of" on L8 might be "off," but the line reads pretty well with "drops (of)" as a noun rather than "drops (off)" as a verb, too.

Has everything a story needs. Excellent. Thumbsup

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The house with a clock on its wall - by Keith - 10-04-2018, 03:18 AM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by dukealien - 10-04-2018, 11:13 AM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by Keith - 10-10-2018, 12:53 AM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by billy - 10-11-2018, 12:43 PM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by Keith - 10-13-2018, 11:59 PM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by billy - 10-04-2018, 05:26 PM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by Thunderembargo - 10-17-2018, 12:10 AM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by Keith - 10-17-2018, 03:29 PM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by vagabond - 11-14-2018, 08:20 PM

RE: The house with a clock on its wall - by Keith - 11-17-2018, 01:21 AM

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