hi fae. for me the poem starts with the 2nd stanza, the first has little if any imagery, the 2nd has lots. i'd suggest giving the 1st stanza some imagery or cut it.
(08-15-2018, 10:59 PM)Fae Wrote: Perplexed
trying to connect
strands together
into something
considered to
be beautiful.
Attempting
to spin words
into a pretty
sweater
which I can wear
when it gets cold.
I put myself in mind
of a car missing wheels;
engine revving loudly
Shifting many gears
But always staying [this line is redundant]
stuck in one place
rusted to the spot
crying oil, in leiu
of my tears. no need for my