forgotten song

[bogpan]

I'm assuming that "Andalusia" refers to the town in southern Spain and not the one in Alabama?

Not sure how "the moon shines in the bull’s sweaty back"? "on" or "off of"...  The moon shines in the window, which is basically shorthand  "shines through". That doesn't seem to apply here.

Really though, just because it is poetry doesn't mean one should string together dependant clauses. Such technique tends to confuse more than enlighten. Deviating from the rules of standard prose needs a very good reason, otherwise it is obfuscating.  

On the hot nights in Andalusia
the moon shines on the bull’s sweaty back,
"ay ay ay the colors".

So forth and so on.

No caps and no periods do not make a piece "more poetic.

Best,

dale

"I'm assuming that "Andalusia" refers to the city in southern Spain and not the one in Alabama?"
Andalusia (/ ˌændəluːsiə, -ziə, -ʒə /; Spanish: Andalucía [andaluthi.a, -si.a]) is an autonomous community in southern Spain. Do I need to give this information to the reader who has no Internet? I do not know how you would react if I ask you "What is Alabama?"
"That does not seem to apply here." Yes, definitely. If I wanted to write exactly the way you suggest it, but definitely in this case, the correct one is "in". There is no thought of mere reflection on a smooth surface.
"Such technique tends to confuse "
This is a long dispute from the time of Apolliner  I do not want to participate in. In my view, this technique gives more freedom to the reader for personal interpretations. The use of "caps and no periodas" also does not make one piece poetically but obliges the reader to follow the author's thought. You, of course, are entitled to "Deviating from the rules of the standard prose needs a very good response". This reason, besides my general philosophy as an author, is also contained in the poem itself. This reason should not be conceived as an independent thought. Otherwise, the magic that any such poem should create is lost.
Thank you for your criticism, which is always interesting and with its  reasons.