06-24-2018, 09:42 PM
These people can't talk well, or aren't. There's a guardedness or an awkwardness that has all the valuable things they try to say sound fragmented. That's obvious to the point of there being no need to mention it. Maybe they like it that way. I don't know what you could do to it to make the form more interesting. Since they're artists, the images break in better than the comments, the adjectives are arty and seen but not heard. Their thinking fragmented and their talking. Too other to come together. So you've presented a clear picture here, at least as I read it. It just lacks a certain energy or formal thread of interest. Maybe the lack of formal ingenuity is enough here.