06-07-2018, 12:42 AM
Quote:… and my colors change as seasons go.
This seems a bit vague and is an abrupt ending. Was this intentional? What was the idea you were trying to convey?
The poem itself seems to mix concepts of relativism and perceptions of reality with social mores and facts. I see the intention, but it feels a that the comparisons were really forced here.
For example:
Quote:My light may not be light for youWhat does this have to do with the initial comparisons?
and another
Quote:For your green may be my blue
seems to be in relation to the beginning:
Quote:Who says that leaves are greenThis just feels awkward to me.
Or sky is blue?
