Transient

[Radetof.Yahska]

Existing on the razors edge of either here nor there. 
Disenfranchised wisps of broken dreams and hopelessness.
The ones living eternally, between the margins.

Hi Ryan!

The opening should end with "neither here nor there" if the idea is exclusion, and not "either" and "or".
While the idea is a good one, you really need to flesh it out a bit. There is not much to keep someone invested here, just three lines that describe a blob-like existence without telling me what I want to know. This I know, I see life within the margins, but the idea or element of choice, of why disenfranchisement, that is the interesting bit that should be explored.

Also, eternal is a strong word, and if you mean it the transient as an archetype, then maybe it doesn't ring true. If you wish to contend this by stating that the existence between margins has led to this ignorance, I would really love to read what you write, but right now it feels too short.

Thanks for the poem!