Transient

[GrhmJngL]

Existing on the razors edge of either here nor there.  As Richard said, it ought to be "neither here nor there", or alternatively, "either here or there".
Disenfranchised wisps of broken dreams and hopelessness.
The ones living eternally, between the margins.

I like the opening, and what you're trying to do here generally, but the reason why this doesn't quite work for me is that it focuses a little to much on naming sensations and emotions rather than describing or evoking them. Abstract nouns like "hopelessness" should be used sparingly in a poem, and probably ought to be avoided in one this length. What's hopeless about their situation? What dreams have been broken?

Especially considering how its so brief, I think something like this would grab the reader a lot more if it had some tangible imagery which shows something of what it is that you're trying to describe. What person or people are you trying to have us empathise with? Was there any particular incident or scene (either first-hand or recounted to you) that made you want to write this? What images come to mind when you're thinking of these people?

Maybe keeping one of these lines more or less as is, and trying something a little more concrete elsewhere in the poem to pull us in. Poems this short express their ideas best through distilled, well chosen images that evoke the situation, rather than trying to pack in as many direct descriptions of the sentiments involved as you can.

I hope this doesn't come across as too critical, though. It's a solid start.