Edit 1: Abel

[alonso ramoran]

Hi just mercedes, couple responses

Good strong images, and the title does a lot of work to set context. Final tweaking suggestions below. Good poem. I read a hint of poisoned blankets at the end, which adds another level.

Abel

We once shared beds 
you had bloodied. There was no A/C I quickly tweaked that, thanks for the catch
to keep you from scratching at your skin, 
a blanket that you tried peeling free of, no "of" sounds a little weird to my ears
as your lungs suppressed annoyance  What would it suppress here then? Are you saying I should say his lungs themselves are suppressed into sleeplessness?
into wheezing sleeplessness.  
 
Let's trade blankets, little brother, 
and go back to dreaming. 




Thanks to Todd for the NaPM prompt #4

I feared the biblical connotations the title would have, but it is only my brother's name.

Best, Alex