Something Old As New (Revision 2c)

[danny_]

Thunderembargo, this is intensive crit workshop.

Also, I don't agree with your points, I'm sorry. Two out of three don't even make sense. My quote in my signature has nothing to do with my poem.

"Branches almost blowing the few panes, aware of detachment?" Is English a second language for you?

If you wouldn't mind - unless you can contribute something meaningful, and in harmony with the nature of the poem, please don't crit on any of my work in the future. Thanks!

Edit: Thank you mods for removing post.