04-18-2018, 11:40 PM
Thank you michellewareham, or just michelle? Welcome to the site, by the way!
That was decent feedback, thank you. I now see an issue with the narrative since I stepped away from this poem for awhile and returned to read your reply. I'm partial to keeping the opening only to set up the scene, but I agree it may eventually get reworked. Some good points you made. I will consider them as I make revisions.
That was decent feedback, thank you. I now see an issue with the narrative since I stepped away from this poem for awhile and returned to read your reply. I'm partial to keeping the opening only to set up the scene, but I agree it may eventually get reworked. Some good points you made. I will consider them as I make revisions.
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