04-12-2018, 06:43 AM
Oh, no problem, and you are right. I agree the poem didn't mention any input about how they should be served. And since it's not after the "come to me" part, it can't even be supposed. It's a good point to consider for a revision.
Yeah you could see the frying if you sat at the counter and since it was in the South at a place called Grits'n'Grill, it's simply the truth, that you could smell them right away. But not exactly a greasy spoon, however, I have to say... it was pretty clean, they also had egg wraps and other non-typical-southern stuff, so it wasn't some run-down country corner greasy place. It was actually near the beach. But then again, who could know based on the poem? My imagination fills in the blanks with my experience, but yours and other readers will see it differently. I wonder if it's important to describe the atmosphere more. (See, I am a pedant too.)
I'd be interested in your revision if you want to PM it over
Yeah you could see the frying if you sat at the counter and since it was in the South at a place called Grits'n'Grill, it's simply the truth, that you could smell them right away. But not exactly a greasy spoon, however, I have to say... it was pretty clean, they also had egg wraps and other non-typical-southern stuff, so it wasn't some run-down country corner greasy place. It was actually near the beach. But then again, who could know based on the poem? My imagination fills in the blanks with my experience, but yours and other readers will see it differently. I wonder if it's important to describe the atmosphere more. (See, I am a pedant too.)
I'd be interested in your revision if you want to PM it over
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