Something Old As New (Revision 2c)

[danny_]

Thanks... again! - we are the only life on this
forum section lately, eh? :]

Suggestion on S1 - Not bad idea but,
don't want to shift focus from image of house
to frosted grass, then back to house again.

I like where you put 'our breath...'
And I like 'clambered on', good stuff.

I agree about the first bit of S7 but I sure
wish I could put the hands part somewhere.
Will think on it.

- danny