04-07-2018, 05:40 AM
I keep it hidden, boiling, festering,
Melting away my soul.
Finally, I succumb.
It's been going on forever, and it will
Never go away.
Everybody knows, but I still say it.
This isn't that bad. For a slight thing, it aint. Maybe you could find other ways of doing acrostics other than the first line, if it's a series. Make the acrostic harder to find as the poems grow deeper.
Being fifteen years old, you could get away with a starting poem at the beginning of a series, like that. But you need to dig deeper to go on.
There's not a lot to fool around with here; as it is, it's a beginning. But hopefully you can write others to make up for it.
I said first line. I meant, other than the first letter of each line.
Melting away my soul.
Finally, I succumb.
It's been going on forever, and it will
Never go away.
Everybody knows, but I still say it.
This isn't that bad. For a slight thing, it aint. Maybe you could find other ways of doing acrostics other than the first line, if it's a series. Make the acrostic harder to find as the poems grow deeper.
Being fifteen years old, you could get away with a starting poem at the beginning of a series, like that. But you need to dig deeper to go on.
There's not a lot to fool around with here; as it is, it's a beginning. But hopefully you can write others to make up for it.
I said first line. I meant, other than the first letter of each line.