Something Old As New (Revision 2c)

[danny_]

Thanks Knot.

The grass is yellow and frosted, and kneeling in it does wet your knees, but I see what you're saying. Need a better word for yellow.

The suggestion of changing to "kneeling, knees wet, to frame" sounds like the knees were already wet. Need to show becoming wet due to kneeling on the ground.

It's not about being nerds or students, it's about their loving relationship. I could put in a couple technical terms about the cameras since they do enjoy photography (and I do too), but knowledge about cameras doesn't equal nerdy-ness. It's just a little adventure together and picture taking. Their relationship is the reason for the stanzas you mentioned, even if those could be improved. S3 would serve the purpose of how one notices the other.

Adding "together" in S6 is not a bad idea.

Thanks for your feedback.