Something Old As New (Revision 2c)
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I've reviewed alexorande's a knot's replies and made adjustments.
Still on my mind:
- ending verses lack the strength of preceding ones
- title does not tie in relationship, only the activity of the couple. it would be nice if both what they did and who they are were reflected in title. (i have a potential solution.)
- deciding on "wet our knees" or "wet our jeans", trying to avoid any possible confusion with p*ing one's own pantalones

Thanks for your attention.
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Something Old As New (Revision 2c) - by danny_ - 03-30-2018, 08:20 AM
RE: Something Old As New - by Richard - 03-30-2018, 11:41 AM
RE: Something Old As New - by danny_ - 03-30-2018, 01:20 PM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 1) - by Knot - 03-30-2018, 10:18 PM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 1) - by danny_ - 03-31-2018, 12:43 AM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2) - by danny_ - 04-01-2018, 06:49 AM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2) - by Knot - 04-02-2018, 12:00 AM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2) - by danny_ - 04-02-2018, 01:00 AM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2b) - by danny_ - 04-06-2018, 02:26 PM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2b) - by Knot - 04-06-2018, 10:08 PM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2c) - by Knot - 04-09-2018, 09:37 PM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2c) - by Knot - 04-10-2018, 01:33 AM
RE: Something Old As New (Revision 2c) - by Knot - 04-11-2018, 09:13 PM



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