I'm Fine

[danny_]

Welcome to the board. I see "I'm Fine" written by the first letter of each line. I'll share a few thoughts-

I keep it hidden, boiling, festering < Indicates inner turmoil
Melting away my soul.
Finally, I succumb. < You give in to some weakness
It's been going on forever, and it will
Never go away. < You reason it's here to stay and cannot be changed.

Everybody knows, but I still say it.

EDIT: I see now you mean everyone knows you are not fine,
but still you say you are. I am left to wonder what you
succumb to. Although your poem is clear and to the point, I am
not touched emotionally because I don't know what you are
struggling with. You have simply phrased a few facts in a clean
fashion. What is the goal of your poem? Why do you post it for
critique? If it's just to make a point, you don't really need to
edit it. But if you are trying to share a true struggle so that
others are touched and can empathize, you need to provide
images of what is boiling, festering, and paint a picture of your
turmoil, so that we can also feel it.

As a side-note, I want to welcome you to writing. I also wrote
at 15 years old. You're probably doing better than I was at
that age. Remember to grab some good books on the subject
if you haven't already. Let me know if you'd like any
recommendations. Feel free to PM any time.