04-05-2018, 06:26 AM
That comma stuff looks ridiculous. Nobody enjoys a stutter in real life, why more in a poem? I don't too much mind the limit-stretching syntax of Cummings but I can't find much in liking commas after every word. I feel like I'm in paranoid grandma's car going 2-7 MPH, stop, go, stop, go... going places. Yea. Not really. Well it gave me a brilliant idea tho:
I'm! going! to! put!
a! serious! flare!
in! my! poems!
He says such poetry compares to Pointillism in that 'points of color are themselves the medium as well as the technique of statement.' - Problem is points of color are color, not black commas, or even individual words which rarely carry much meaning without the context of other words. The points of color form a whole picture together in a single glance, no need to look at each dot one at a time - poems with hundreds of commas slow down such a glance at the big picture. It's like trying to drive a mile down a pothole-plastered road.
I'm! going! to! put!
a! serious! flare!
in! my! poems!
He says such poetry compares to Pointillism in that 'points of color are themselves the medium as well as the technique of statement.' - Problem is points of color are color, not black commas, or even individual words which rarely carry much meaning without the context of other words. The points of color form a whole picture together in a single glance, no need to look at each dot one at a time - poems with hundreds of commas slow down such a glance at the big picture. It's like trying to drive a mile down a pothole-plastered road.
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