03-23-2018, 10:37 AM
Hi Silent,
I like this short but sweet piece
ice cream night:
serve me all
your cloyed alms
but your diamonds (I agree that the use of "But" here does break the flow of the piece)
on the tongue
don’t taste good
The imagery I got upon reading was that of someone with a bit of a Masochistic personality of enjoying the gluttony of sweetness and over indulgence while not deriving pleasure of what I'm assuming would be a much traditionally pleasant experience.
I like this short but sweet piece
ice cream night:
serve me all
your cloyed alms
but your diamonds (I agree that the use of "But" here does break the flow of the piece)
on the tongue
don’t taste good
The imagery I got upon reading was that of someone with a bit of a Masochistic personality of enjoying the gluttony of sweetness and over indulgence while not deriving pleasure of what I'm assuming would be a much traditionally pleasant experience.