Confines of Mortality

[zwubz]

Hi Lorvick! I mainly create Free Verse material as well and I really enjoyed this one. Just my take on it. 

                                                                     Sifting through the notions of our origin. 
                                                                     Burdened with the sentiment of isolation.
                                                                           Diligent deliberation of eternity.
                                                                           Under the influence of despair. ( being Isolated and yet deliberating with"eternity" may seem clouded or confusing to some a different image might help convey the thought.)
                                                                           One may presume the soul to be
                                                                               a collection of memories ( I think you nailed it on these two lines and shows a great image in the mind of the reader)
                                                                                   set aimlessly adrift
                                                                                   through perpetual
                                                                                        darkness.(The ending was on a nice tone that fit the rest of the piece. )