03-19-2018, 09:44 AM
Hi RiverNotch.
I thought the The looked wrong. Thank you for mentioning it! I will have to play around with what you said because it seems to make much sense. I like your idea about the verse, too. I chose John 3:16 because it was my very first memory verse (when I was 11) and I thought about Mrs. Stanley's words never forget who you are and the verse in 2 Timothy 3:15 that says: And that from a child thou hast known the holy scriptures, which are able to make thee wise unto salvation through faith which is in Christ Jesus.16 All scripture is given by inspiration of God, and is profitable for doctrine, for reproof, for correction, for instruction in righteousness:17 That the man of God may be perfect, thoroughly furnished unto all good works.
Not sure if I will change the Scripture part, but I will look into it, it certainly got me to thinking!
Thank you so much for your kind consideration and helping me shape up the work!
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Hi Frank.
Yes, it was a nice visit and full of surprises. It was more than a few years ago. I went after I heard the museum had burned. I was sad when I learned the big billows of smoke I watched from my back porch was the old museum going up in flames. I saved some coins in a jar purposing in my heart to donate them towards a new museum and once it was full I headed off to see if I could enter the area and ask if there were new efforts to rebuild. I felt like a goofy kid that day taking a jar of coins. The curator was happy to receive my meager contribution and showed me tables of newly donated artifacts. Folks had brought in many items and the curator seemed positive the museum would be better than ever. I was kindly given a grand tour of the area. It was special.
I will definitely eliminate led. It felt right when I wrote it, but your bringing it into light made me see it isn't right, thank you! It was very kind of you taking the time to read and critique my poem. I really appreciate it!
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I thought the The looked wrong. Thank you for mentioning it! I will have to play around with what you said because it seems to make much sense. I like your idea about the verse, too. I chose John 3:16 because it was my very first memory verse (when I was 11) and I thought about Mrs. Stanley's words never forget who you are and the verse in 2 Timothy 3:15 that says: And that from a child thou hast known the holy scriptures, which are able to make thee wise unto salvation through faith which is in Christ Jesus.16 All scripture is given by inspiration of God, and is profitable for doctrine, for reproof, for correction, for instruction in righteousness:17 That the man of God may be perfect, thoroughly furnished unto all good works.
Not sure if I will change the Scripture part, but I will look into it, it certainly got me to thinking!
Thank you so much for your kind consideration and helping me shape up the work!
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Hi Frank.
Yes, it was a nice visit and full of surprises. It was more than a few years ago. I went after I heard the museum had burned. I was sad when I learned the big billows of smoke I watched from my back porch was the old museum going up in flames. I saved some coins in a jar purposing in my heart to donate them towards a new museum and once it was full I headed off to see if I could enter the area and ask if there were new efforts to rebuild. I felt like a goofy kid that day taking a jar of coins. The curator was happy to receive my meager contribution and showed me tables of newly donated artifacts. Folks had brought in many items and the curator seemed positive the museum would be better than ever. I was kindly given a grand tour of the area. It was special.
I will definitely eliminate led. It felt right when I wrote it, but your bringing it into light made me see it isn't right, thank you! It was very kind of you taking the time to read and critique my poem. I really appreciate it!
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