Verbatim

[Knot]

Hey Johnny,
leaving aside the question of whether this is poetry or not
- more knowledgeable minds can comment on that -
you seem to have rather hoist yourself...
The conceit, 'Verbatim', suffers from the fact that, ultimately,
this little slice of life isn't sufficiently interesting/entertaining.
It's a long ride just to have a cat interrupt a phone call.
That said, I think there is an entertaining piece trapped in this
flabby form. Put it on a diet editor - my suggestion;

(Almost) Verbatim

"From tomorrow, I’m back on it.
I feel like crap, look like crap
and the bigger I get, the shorter
my shorts become. So,

you are going to support me.
No muttering, no complaining.
No cream, no sugar, a thimble
of milk in my tea, no more no less

and when we go to the shop no
'can we get this? Can we get that?'
...."


Best, Knot.