03-10-2018, 01:00 AM
I have old skins
given to me
that matter now.
I.
A black, 50’s leather jacket
teen hoods wore back then;
this one is from a gentler soul,
running buddy Kev, prince,
gladiator, leader of our
endless war protests.
[His grin, mock-trick eyes,
party-time hail-fellow-well-met
exhortations to go full-blast,
in all-night carouses,
prep for the barricades
the following cloudy day.] [this is incomplete, though impressionable]
Fatally handsome, but shy
in the corners of his shine.
The big C hit him from behind,
we all of us fell with him,
he couldn’t get up along with us,
this time.
I feel honor, grace,
and memories that surge,
expand, when I put his jacket on;
the only protest left is shouting,
in his voice, against absence. -beautiful sentiment
II.
A Scotch plaid winter wool shirt,
designed for woods-work -its blue & green
and rambling; my father wore it
for both. [He, a business man,
loved our land, gardens,
fields and meadows like a proprietor
of the untold riches,relief and solitude [again, I am given the emotion through rush or run-on
they possessed, and shared with him.] but am left without tidy perfection of order or clarity]
Pre-dawn Februaries he donned it
to plow both driveways, -I want to see the word warm somewhere.
loving the storms of powder
he volumed up around him.
As dawn broke, He’d walk
the maple sugar lines,
then check the collecting tub
in the shed he’d built himself,
next to the barn brother Don and I
built along with him.
Mom waited for him
with over-easy eggs,
loving conversation,
and, yah, sometimes -yeah (unless a clue of German, Dutch, etc., descent
slight differences. is deliberate.)
I have
new skins
I give
proper
wear to
now.
Okay, I am not sure the writer's or even speaker's intent, but I see the leather jacket is being worn, not the tartan. Though I understand the dynamics of science concerning certain things, I am wondering if the choice to wear one article over another also had to do with relationship or sentiment, as seemed to be hinted in this contrast: I. Offered memory with emotion and sentiment. II. Offered just visual memory lacking expression of loss, passion, or sentiment. Thank you for the read and opportunity to critique.
-nibbed
given to me
that matter now.
I.
A black, 50’s leather jacket
teen hoods wore back then;
this one is from a gentler soul,
running buddy Kev, prince,
gladiator, leader of our
endless war protests.
[His grin, mock-trick eyes,
party-time hail-fellow-well-met
exhortations to go full-blast,
in all-night carouses,
prep for the barricades
the following cloudy day.] [this is incomplete, though impressionable]
Fatally handsome, but shy
in the corners of his shine.
The big C hit him from behind,
we all of us fell with him,
he couldn’t get up along with us,
this time.
I feel honor, grace,
and memories that surge,
expand, when I put his jacket on;
the only protest left is shouting,
in his voice, against absence. -beautiful sentiment
II.
A Scotch plaid winter wool shirt,
designed for woods-work -its blue & green
and rambling; my father wore it
for both. [He, a business man,
loved our land, gardens,
fields and meadows like a proprietor
of the untold riches,relief and solitude [again, I am given the emotion through rush or run-on
they possessed, and shared with him.] but am left without tidy perfection of order or clarity]
Pre-dawn Februaries he donned it
to plow both driveways, -I want to see the word warm somewhere.
loving the storms of powder
he volumed up around him.
As dawn broke, He’d walk
the maple sugar lines,
then check the collecting tub
in the shed he’d built himself,
next to the barn brother Don and I
built along with him.
Mom waited for him
with over-easy eggs,
loving conversation,
and, yah, sometimes -yeah (unless a clue of German, Dutch, etc., descent
slight differences. is deliberate.)
I have
new skins
I give
proper
wear to
now.
Okay, I am not sure the writer's or even speaker's intent, but I see the leather jacket is being worn, not the tartan. Though I understand the dynamics of science concerning certain things, I am wondering if the choice to wear one article over another also had to do with relationship or sentiment, as seemed to be hinted in this contrast: I. Offered memory with emotion and sentiment. II. Offered just visual memory lacking expression of loss, passion, or sentiment. Thank you for the read and opportunity to critique.
-nibbed
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