Confines of Mortality

[TemporaryForever]

Good first effort. Free form poetry can seem so easy, but even it can be daunting sometimes because even with a non rhyming verse you still need a bit of flow and structure. Consider this slight revision:

Sifting through the notions of our origin.
Burdened with the sentiment of isolation.
Diligent deliberation of eternity.
Under the influence of despair.
One may presume the soul to be
a collection of memories
set aimlessly adrift
through perpetual
darkness.