Confines of Mortality

[Lorvick]

I'm new to creating poems, this is actually my first! I need to practice quite a bit. I just revised the poem based upon critiques.  

sifting through the notions of our origin
burdened with the sentiment of isolation
diligent deliberation of eternity 
under the influence of despair 
one may presume the soul to be 
of memory's collection,
aimlessly adrift;
through perpetual 
darkness