i didn´t understand the question (ed2)

[FP123]

Hi.

I'm new to pigpen, but your poem caught my eye.

I like the poem and its stories (Alzheimers and the recollection) very much. Mainly my suggestions reflect where I'd do breaks in my own free verse.

Cheers, and thanks for having my two bob's worth on a fine poem.

Frank

about the question                                                                (edit leanne, tiger)                                   

the old lady has alzheimer´s and she said
about seventy years ago there was a field
in czechoslovakia, maybe not only there and not only then. I like the ambiguity of the recollection here. The line length here seems a little clunky. Not sure if you're working to a structure. I'd probably break at '...not only there....'.
it might have grown wheat in summer
but one late autumn day
the earth produced hands and arms, so dramatic to encounter. Excellent
digging to reach the sky
and its air -
then still. Perhaps '...then stilled...'. ie was digging, then stilled.
and still she seems waiting for answers. Again, I think the line a tiny bit clunky. I'd maybe break at '...waiting...', with '...for answers...' on a new line.

about the question

she had alzheimers, but the old lady once said
that about seventy years ago there was a field
in czechoslovakia, maybe not only then and not only there.
it might have produced grain in summer,
but one autumn day it grew a few arms,
digging to reach the sky
and its air -
then still.
and still she seems waiting for answers.
i can´t wait to share her dementia.

  mainly i´d like to know if content is clear enough and if it´s a bad idea to let the subject speak in the last line