Baghdad (prose poem) - edit 1

[ritwiksadhu33]

The money was obedient.
(love this line, but I can't decide if it needs to be elaborated upon, or not)
The only elaboration that comes to mind is a scene of the narrator
buying something. Not sure that would fit in.

Perhaps, give the context, you could compare the money to a hawk or falcon
used for hunting (obedient and dangerous)? Just a thought.


Best, Knot.

Great suggestion, thanks. I decided to keep it to generic bird of prey for now to fit the lines, but I might try redoing that section and the middle part later — the falcon analogy sounds promising.