02-28-2018, 09:05 PM
Hey all,
first off I didn't mean to come across as argumentative or defensive when responding to feedback posted already on this piece so I'm sorry if that's how it came across. I can't say it enough but I'm very pleased to be here on this forum and I'm very grateful for the time and effort people put into critiquing someone else's work.
Moving on.
Billy,
thank you for the response, when it comes to revising this I'll definitely be looking at trying to help place the piece a little better, the river suggestion is a pretty good shout. I also agree that its worth giving "she" more of an identity, although I'm reluctant to give her a name, so I'll have to think about that.
The more technical aspects of poetry have always been my sticking point and form is definitely at the top of my list of deficiencies in my writing, but I'll have a look at that when it comes to the revision.
I'll let you know how I get on with this
Cheers again
Johnny
first off I didn't mean to come across as argumentative or defensive when responding to feedback posted already on this piece so I'm sorry if that's how it came across. I can't say it enough but I'm very pleased to be here on this forum and I'm very grateful for the time and effort people put into critiquing someone else's work.
Moving on.
Billy,
thank you for the response, when it comes to revising this I'll definitely be looking at trying to help place the piece a little better, the river suggestion is a pretty good shout. I also agree that its worth giving "she" more of an identity, although I'm reluctant to give her a name, so I'll have to think about that.
The more technical aspects of poetry have always been my sticking point and form is definitely at the top of my list of deficiencies in my writing, but I'll have a look at that when it comes to the revision.
I'll let you know how I get on with this
Cheers again
Johnny