02-28-2018, 07:39 AM
(02-28-2018, 01:07 AM)20_Hamilton_18 Wrote: Tectak,Hi 20-hami.
Perhaps it is just a story with line breaks and stops, perhaps its not. That is up to each of us to decide. Definitely sat down to write this as a poem, does that make it one? I like to think I could copy out a receipt from my weekly groceries and call that a poem, maybe I will. I'm glad you enjoyed it at any rate and I'm very much obliged for the feedback, it definitely gives me something to think about in relation to this piece and we shall see how that impacts on any sort of revisions I may make to this in the future.
Good luck with the hangover
Johnny
I cannot tell you how many times I have heard that a grocery list can be a poem. I no longer argue. My reasoning is simple...gather up receipts from Tesco and post them here. If anyone thinks they are worthy then I will post an Asda receipt. Thing is...it is not poetry and you would be seen to be disingenuous to suggest otherwise...otherwise why try?
Poetry is hard to define BUT good poetry DOES exist...ips facto so does bad. Do you know the difference? I think you do or why revision 1?
Best,
tectak
Such judgements are best left to poetry discussion -- there are plenty of threads there on this topic, so it doesn't need to enter into Intensive Critique. Whether you like the style of the poem or not is irrelevant to critique. It is the style it is written in/ Admin