Moose and Squirrel (Revision)
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I played around with the opening and rewatched the rocky and bulwinkle nothing up my sleeve bits (I'd forgotten presto). I tried to clear up some of the issues you'd all raised. I'm not sure if this gets me closer. I did fully agree with you knot on chopping the opening. I wanted to put in more cultural references but the sky stuff takes off a decade too late. So, I just moved it back to the source material again.

Thank you all. Let me know if this gets any closer to where it should be.

Best,

Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 02-28-2018, 02:01 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by Knot - 02-28-2018, 02:42 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by Keith - 02-28-2018, 03:29 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by Todd - 02-28-2018, 03:37 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by vagabond - 02-28-2018, 04:24 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by Todd - 02-28-2018, 04:33 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel - by Todd - 02-28-2018, 04:39 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Knot - 02-28-2018, 05:00 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 03-01-2018, 01:32 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by vagabond - 02-28-2018, 07:14 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 03-01-2018, 01:34 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Knot - 03-01-2018, 01:53 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 03-01-2018, 02:12 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Richard - 03-01-2018, 04:19 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 03-01-2018, 06:21 AM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by RC James - 03-05-2018, 05:29 PM
RE: Moose and Squirrel (Revision) - by Todd - 03-14-2018, 04:30 AM



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