02-25-2018, 10:39 PM
(11-14-2017, 10:39 AM)Persadia Wrote: PushI Like this poem. I get the impression, from reading this, of repression. Of being pushed down. As if the authors limbs are weighted. Of moving underwater. I think there is a lot of good material to work with. As a constructive criticism, I thought there should be more use of simile. I liked the ending. The idea that it ends on, what could be considered a positive note.
Curl up
Protect yourself
Your head
Your Heart
your Being
The onslaught
Push forward
one step
Each moment a lost one
Nothing to sink into
Nothing to become
The torrent continues
Breathe. Recall the Reason
But death, ever present. cutting
Each moment a thief
stealing your soul
steeling your soul
Be yourself; everyone else is already taken
Oscar Wilde
Oscar Wilde

