Paper Dolls

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Hey, brand new here so please bear with me. When I sit down to write a critic of anyone’s works I like to read it aloud and see how it feels on the tongue and in this instance there points in which it sits comfortable on both my tongue and my ear and others in which it feels uncomfortable and disjointed. As such the central message of the work is lost because I am becoming distracted by the process of reading the piece. Poetry should work both on paper and as a piece of spoken art. That being said there are images that I like despite finding the central conceit of Paper Dolls trite. I find the image of the scythe and the clock hands underused and would suggest taking this stanza and expanding it as in this I think you have the strongest aspect of the poem itself. Going forward I would use this portion of the work as a jumping off point.

Regards
Johnny