Metal

[Tiger the Lion]

Cold gleaming silver
imprints on the skin
above your heart.

Four years of iron
wither like a pick up
left to rust.

Hey WJ. I'm getting hung up on the word "wither". I just don't see either iron or a pickup as withering. It's too organic a word for metal. I almost wish you could use "rust" twice. But that's crazy talk.  Anyway, just my little hiccup.
The soft vowels in this short piece are very nice. They bring out the punch of "Cold" and "Iron".
Paul