Paper Dolls

[TemporaryForever]

First of all, I love your concept. There's some great stuff here. I think you just need a little tightening on the meter and a few polishes and you'll be set. Consider the following revision of your second draft:

Paper dolls
Cut to please
In perfect rows
Sharply creased

Bleached parts
Creep into decay
Paper creasing into scars
Sheets of ivory fray

Like a ruggest scythe
The clocks hands reave
Paper heads tumble
The end offers reprieve
Infinity never stumbles

Paper dolls stare
Empty eyes never blink
Paper dolls do not care
What you and I think.