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If trees could talk
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02-21-2018, 01:22 AM
perhaps cut 'of value', since its being placed at the center is what makes the rhyme too obvious; remove 'rather', to keep the rhythm generally terse; punctuate that second line, as it just demands it; and decensor that ending, as that form of self-censorship only undercuts the humor without providing any additional insights.
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If trees could talk - by lauraelizdok - 02-20-2018, 06:26 AM
RE: If trees could talk - by tectak - 02-20-2018, 08:43 AM
RE: If trees could talk - by ellajam - 02-20-2018, 11:05 PM
RE: If trees could talk - by RiverNotch - 02-21-2018, 01:22 AM
RE: If trees could talk - by nibbed - 02-21-2018, 04:03 PM
RE: If trees could talk - by AndyBryant123 - 03-02-2018, 03:04 AM
RE: If trees could talk - by Fatman Butter - 03-16-2018, 06:03 PM
RE: If trees could talk - by Thunderembargo - 03-22-2018, 06:41 AM
RE: If trees could talk - by FITAHW_ - 03-27-2018, 04:10 PM
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