Nature's Epilogue - tear it apart!

[tectak]

I watch the sun in passing
to its hand the green does grow;
through its awesome powers
the gift of life does flow.

I watch in apprehension
this golden deity at work
when I see the gift of life withdrawn
turning fertile oasis
into barren desert.

And I can't help but wonder
if it is written by design
in nature's contract of power
a sub-clause of decline.

I see the sun bring Eden
I see the rain guard the fruit;
I see two forces restraining
from what in-silo each can do.

And if such be Her intention
A just balance in life's span
Is it to any wonder
what will result of man?

I see it all around me
In sad streams, and sinking ice slopes too
the sins we have created,
the lamenting we must do.

But nature wrote long before us
a steady and condign plan
and in that, perhaps She always knew:
man will destroy man.

Hello Laura,
as you yourself commented, you may be a little overambitious in this forum and no one wants see you get torn apart. That's not the idea. If you want to move this piece to say, Mild, just say the word. Have a look at Leanne's notes on novice poets common errors...it would help. For me, just avoid the word awesome....always. Mod.
Best,
tectak