Ice Cream Night (Tear it apart!)

[Writerbyfire]

ice cream night:
serve me all
your cloyed alms

but your diamonds      // I'm kind of underwhelmed by the transitional use of "but." it's the one word that seems really out of place
on the tongue                 at such an important transition
don’t taste good

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Hi all, I'm pretty new to the site so thank you for taking a look at this poem I wrote. I need to edit this for a class I'm taking and any comments - no matter how harsh - are deeply appreciated! Thanks again.

I absolutely love the imagery in the first stanza. It really seemed like cloyed alms was reaching the edge of over bloated language but the more I read the more I felt it was right. If it was a longer poem it'd probably be too much but here it works after a few re readings. 

When I first read the second stanza the thing I thought of was a tongue piercing which turned the Ice cream night into a date which added the first real context to the poem but then I sort of got stuck on that and couldn't get other contexts. With it being so sort there's very little clues to go off of which make whats there so quintessentially important (i.e. not one wasted word) Further reading connects charity with diamonds but see I'm still thinking about marriage now. 

Is there significance to there being no punctuation other than the colon after night. If not then punctuation could grant more clues to the meanings of the poem.