02-14-2018, 02:16 PM
Hello TF
Welcome here. Thank you for a fun poem to read,
very lively, pushing me through. I thought it
deserved a better title, though, just can't think
of one.
BLANK PAGE
I sat down at my desk tonight,
and found I had no words to write.
No message that I could convey,
nor a funny or witty thing to say.
No nostalgic tale of days gone by,
or wondrous adventure on mountains high.
No princesses, kings or warrior knights,
No ice, no fire, no epic fights.
No clever yarn about my youth, i like yarn used here
or a tactful dose of truth.
No sagas of love or burning rage,
not a single thing to grace the page.
In fact, it came as quite a shock
as I'm just not one for writers block! seeking an apostrophe
It's disappointing because everybody knows, for everyone?
I'm quite the man when it comes to prose.
But on this night, at this desk,
I'm so far from my very best.
I ache and I scream and I fight and fight,
but I just can't find the words to write.
I have the pen, I have the ink,
"Come on now, man! You've got think!" I wasn't sure about L-1, but up until this point I was smiling.
There's an easy way to break the curse,
just find a line, a rhyme, a verse.
Nothing creative bursts from my head,
It's just awash with fog instead. awash seems unusual, but I certainly like the word
My head is nodding, my vision fading,
what little hope I had? Degrading. nice variety/change of verse
And this barrenness my soul will reap,
as I lay me down to sleep.
I can only hope, as I retire,
that I do not think of things too dire. maybe eliminate "that"
Perhaps when I wake, in mornings light, apostrophe?
I'll finally find those words to write.
what a fun poem to read.
thank you for the read
and opportunity to critique.
best wishes on your first
full volume!
-nibbed
Welcome here. Thank you for a fun poem to read,
very lively, pushing me through. I thought it
deserved a better title, though, just can't think
of one.
BLANK PAGE
I sat down at my desk tonight,
and found I had no words to write.
No message that I could convey,
nor a funny or witty thing to say.
No nostalgic tale of days gone by,
or wondrous adventure on mountains high.
No princesses, kings or warrior knights,
No ice, no fire, no epic fights.
No clever yarn about my youth, i like yarn used here
or a tactful dose of truth.
No sagas of love or burning rage,
not a single thing to grace the page.
In fact, it came as quite a shock
as I'm just not one for writers block! seeking an apostrophe
It's disappointing because everybody knows, for everyone?
I'm quite the man when it comes to prose.
But on this night, at this desk,
I'm so far from my very best.
I ache and I scream and I fight and fight,
but I just can't find the words to write.
I have the pen, I have the ink,
"Come on now, man! You've got think!" I wasn't sure about L-1, but up until this point I was smiling.
There's an easy way to break the curse,
just find a line, a rhyme, a verse.
Nothing creative bursts from my head,
It's just awash with fog instead. awash seems unusual, but I certainly like the word
My head is nodding, my vision fading,
what little hope I had? Degrading. nice variety/change of verse
And this barrenness my soul will reap,
as I lay me down to sleep.
I can only hope, as I retire,
that I do not think of things too dire. maybe eliminate "that"
Perhaps when I wake, in mornings light, apostrophe?
I'll finally find those words to write.
what a fun poem to read.
thank you for the read
and opportunity to critique.
best wishes on your first
full volume!
-nibbed
there's always a better reason to love