First Edit: Death (in life)

[alonso ramoran]

I was trying to say that as a complete phrase, the evil that is inspired by a known (or necessary) fate
My apologies, I misread those lines. 

I didn't mention it in my critique but I think what you have right now is a good place to start. The ideas are there, but for me it just needs to be fleshed out a little more.

Best, Alex