Conscious Disregard

[nibbed]

Hi yimbus

I liked your poem. It was very neatly written
and I liked your choice of form, too. I thought
about Queen Vashti. I had wondered how she
had survived when King Ahasuerus found a
replacement, but then upon further study
I learned she was the child of a king and would
be okay. I am limited to commenting, but hope
to be a blessing, somehow..





Conscious Disregard                                          The title took me to my thoughts about the book of Esther


These words supreme to me                             and these supreme words, Scripture
parade an effervescence,                                   I love parade & effervescence. What a wonderful choice of words to use.
      which of the spirit
      trickles over
      begone from reality.                                    this hinted a change of direction

Repressed by pillars,                                          I thought of a place in the middle east where pillars are carved into rock, Petra
whilst annealed in hills
that call the mockingjay,
      to seek refuge
      beneath its wings
      of endless comforting.                                I thought about the place where Bibles will be hidden.

Ponderous deeds deny me,                             I wondered if fear was the motivator of denial
from these knolls of earth
and strands of green;                                      my poetic knowledge of metaphor is poor, so I did not understand
      unfulfilled verses                                                                                                                         green strands
      expose,                                                     

these words supreme to me.                            interesting how mockingjay pulls the ending together.




the poem brought about many thoughts
and pictures flashed into my mind.

all the best to you


-nibbed