01-31-2018, 07:33 PM
(01-31-2018, 05:53 AM)yimbus Wrote: Changed to "parade an effervescence".so, it´s about idealistic thoughts or moral principles, proclaimed but not followed through with? and the feeling of failure that comes along with it or maybe even some kind of schizophrenic dissociation to avoid feelings of failure or a bad conscience about having double standards?
The overall intention of the poem was the subject, narrator, or just someone...has words they may say or think, that they do not support in action. They "consciously disregard" them.
These words supreme to me --> double meaning of either from God, or just ideas the person may think but not hold themselves to the same standard
parade an effervescence, --> they show vitality and enthusiasm
which of the spirit --> of their moral/spiritual character
trickles over
begone from reality. --> but they don't match those thoughts with real actions.
Repressed by pillars, --> pillars as a symbol for law, civilization, order. they may repressed the subject from their goal, or maybe they feel hopeless or comfort in the stableness
whilst annealed in hills --> strengthened by nature
that call the mockingjay, --> "mockingjay" could be a follower of the subject's thoughts/ pure intention, or follower of nature
to seek refuge
beneath its wings
of endless comforting. --> beckoning of nature to reach their goal
Ponderous deeds deny me, ---> struggles of person as they fail to reach their goal
from these knolls of earth
and strands of green; --> of being one with nature, or of their own nature
unfulfilled verses --> their words, thoughts, poems that are eloquent in concept
expose, --> yet fail to reach by action
these words supreme to me.
i have no idea what nature/ wilderness has to do with that though... except that it reminds me of instinctual needs that would be more deciding than any moral code.. however i am not sure if this is what you meant as a comforting thought.
reading your revision + explanation i thought it´s a little like saying "war is a bad thing". almost everyone is aware of those mechanisms in general, what is trickier is to look at concrete examples.
not sure what made you write the poem and if there is some way to give it a personal aspect. don´t get me wrong, i think it´s worth writing about, just very difficult
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