Conscious Disregard

[Todd]

Hey yimbus-
Yer taking a real chance posting this outside of the "soft crit" zone.  I see that most folks have taken a "Conscious Disregard" for this piece,  and that is out of sheer restraint and mercy.  

I can only ask that you read this aloud to yourself, and then someone else.  If that "someone else" has a very puzzled look don't be surprised.  I am personally curious as to the meaning of "floss my effervescence."  Please don't try to explain it.

The good news is that yer poem writing is just beginning and there is plenty of time to work past clunkers.  The operative word here being "work."  Otherwise, it's all over before it can get started.  

Good luck!
... Mark

Floss also means “flaunt” or “show off”

I don't think I've ever seen any dictionary definition of floss used in that way. Could you please give your source--so we can learn. Google was no help to me. Even if floss did carry that meaning, the phrasing you use comes off awkwardly. I'm serious though about wanted to see the dictionary reference you're using (not sarcastic in the slightest).