01-27-2018, 04:18 AM
(11-14-2017, 10:39 AM)Persadia Wrote: PushThis poem reads like a staccato burst of reflex reactions of the mind - indeed, lines with haphazard indents is a technique that might work well with it. "Stealing your soul" is a bit of a clichéd phrase though, and saying it twice does not make it less of one. As such, you might want to work on the ending, although changing it entirely might detract from the central idea that conceived the poem.
Curl up
Protect yourself
Your head
Your Heart
your Being
The onslaught
Push forward
one step
Each moment a lost one
Nothing to sink into
Nothing to become
The torrent continues
Breathe. Recall the Reason
But death, ever present. cutting
Each moment a thief
stealing your soul
steeling your soul

