01-18-2018, 08:33 PM
This works well for me, bitter cold and scary, the last line an eyeopener, full of both the movement of time and responsibility.
One point you might think about: "in" may be a little weak, there may be a word to describe the wind's effect better but for me the poem as is is satisfying and complete.
Good morning,
, thanks for posting it.
One point you might think about: "in" may be a little weak, there may be a word to describe the wind's effect better but for me the poem as is is satisfying and complete.
Good morning,
, thanks for posting it.(01-18-2018, 04:48 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: January wind
in every crack and crevice
we let between us
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