01-13-2018, 08:56 AM
(01-13-2018, 08:54 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:No, you gave no actual criticism of the poem or its content. Calling something awful is not useful feedback which is why it's a violation of the guidelines on this forum... I don't think I'm a fantastic writer but I know for a fact this is not an awful poem. If you want to give me some real feedback, go ahead, but otherwise take your negativity somewhere else.(01-13-2018, 08:51 AM)ADUnser Wrote:i stand by my comment, it'll will improve your writing.(01-13-2018, 08:46 AM)shemthepenman Wrote: this is an embarrassingly awful rap, and an even worse poem. my suggestion is read more, listen to something that isn't fucking tupac and throw this shit in the bin.Well for one, if you read the intro you'd know this wasn't a rap, and two I posted it here because I'm trying to get better at writing. Thanks for being an ass though.
and i'll wait for ella to launch this sage advice off the forum... and then re-post it...