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the girl had been born in dijon
her fathers named her grey-poupon
she left france for the cash
to sell class and panache
for whom confuse big cars with brawn

the above poems are so good that i thought i could lower the standard a bit.
tiger, the story seems about something a little stale, in the last stanza it turnes sweet (thank god sugar doesn´t dull down in taste)
keith, though i don´t get the whole story i think your poem is definitely not low on fat.
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-on - by RiverNotch - 01-04-2018, 03:09 PM
RE: -on - by Tiger the Lion - 01-05-2018, 07:14 AM
RE: -on - by Keith - 01-05-2018, 11:41 AM
RE: -on - by vagabond - 01-06-2018, 10:18 PM
RE: -on - by nibbed - 01-07-2018, 04:03 AM
RE: -on - by vagabond - 01-08-2018, 05:20 AM
RE: -on - by nibbed - 01-08-2018, 01:38 PM
RE: -on - by nibbed - 01-08-2018, 03:50 PM



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