Slow Afternoons - Edit

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Slow Afternoons

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On rainy, weary afternoons
my internet connection lags—
not due to wires becoming wet
but from my sleepless neighbor streaming
videos in lieu of dreaming.

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Thanks to @chopblock for the good critique.  I've addressed the criticism in this edit.

At the risk of explaining... "slows" was nice for dragging things out, but repeated the title; "crawls" is a good suggestion, but in the end I favored "lags" because it suggests the way a bad internet connection behaves as well as that it *should* be going faster... a little moral harrumph,  with the em dash for drag.  As to replacing "empty," it was just, well, empty - which is descriptive enough, but I stuck in "weary" because you can't beat Poe for describing a laudanum downer.