These distant mountains speak

[Todd]

Hi Hannah, 

Here are some comments for you.

(I really don't have a title for this. Titles are not my strength.)--If you recognize this, that's a good thing. There were many aspects of poetry that were not my strength at one time but have since gotten better. The hard part in writing is when you don't see the deficiency. I encourage you to focus on titles (perhaps you could start a thread in the discussion forum on the subject) and watch the progress you are able to make.

These distant mountains speak--There is a convention in poetry of sometimes using the first line as a title. This line is a good first line and a good title. It has an evocative quality to it that draws the reader to the poem. Just something to think about. You have a lot of flexibility.
in tones too low for the living to hear.--I'll limit these comments a bit since we're in basic and I don't want to overwhelm you with too much. While "for the living to hear" is interesting. If the speaker can hear it there is someone among the living who makes that statement a lie. I rhink contextually it's in tones that the living don't associate as speech. That said your statement relieves the tension of the first line rather than build on the conceit. I think what you may want to do here is blend this idea into the next line and work on not lowering the tension (example: in tones of winter snow). Just a thought 
Winter snow,
nestled on peaks
and crags,
is a single syllable --
a soft vowel sound.--That's lovely phrasing: the softness of snow captured in a syllable, love the soft vowel sound. 


I cannot hear the language--Not so definite. You probably want "I struggle to hear" or some such  
of these mountains,
though I listen,
my bare feet--maybe with instead of my
on stony soil,
my lips wet--I wonder how this sequence works with hearing. Unless the lips are trying to form the unspoken words which I guess is a possibility. Though I think you need a bit more to strengthen that connection.
with glacial waters.


I sometimes hear the echo
of those words--probably cut this line
in the footfalls
of a cottontail rabbit,
in the hissing of a
rattlesnake hiding
in the tall, summer grass.--This was a nice sequence and ending. There's a hint of danger in the knowledge. I like your specific concrete choices in this strophe.  

I hope the comments will be helpful to you.

Best,

Todd